Pitch Feedback

I presented both of my ideas to two of my tutors, and was given feedback on both of them. They said that my Luddite idea was the better of the two, and I should produce that spread for the olio book. The main problem with my second idea (the message in the bottle) was that it wasn't as well developed as the Luddite one. That was intentional as I was trying to have two different ideas, but It didn't pay off in the end.

As for my Luddite idea, the main problems were the composition and the lack of any detail in the background. The biggest issue being the characters of Rebecca and Ludd being too close to each other, making it difficult to see that Rebecca is raising his arm to cheer, and also obscuring a lot of Ludd's body.

As for the lack of background, I am thinking of framing the entire picture in shadow, with perhaps a few background details being picked out by the weak light, such as a shelf or something.

My work was also compared to that of the political cartoonist Steve Bell, so I'll be looking at his work in greater detail in another post.